VerY cutE! AnD a reallY gooD ideA foR a poeM. ReallY enjoyeD readinG iT!
5/5..

luzaN

Hi dear,

your poems are flourishing, each and every expression there could be a precious cherish awaits from the professional authors... well done and keep up your work.. 100 marks and you deserve for this poem..

Nazeer

Your word choice is absolutely amazing for your age and I'm in awe reading some of your poems. Keep it up!

Very nice choice of words... too witty for your age... I love it!

Really well written. love it!!

Very nice poem with great lexical power and poetic qualities. I really adored this poem 5/5

Tc
Fsams

You should capitalize I in every stanza, that leaves better impression.
Anyway, the poem is great, very dark and truly excellently written, with powerful atmosphere and great wording. Also, it's very creative.
My favorite stanza is:
-free me, save me,
from my spurious freedom.
mortified spirit, impounded soul,
waiting for salvation to come-
5/5 from me, truly deserved