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by TamborineMan   Aug 20, 2007


I'm full awake and breathless.
In this broken moment,
my insecurities expose
a lost heart that's failing.

You were my addiction,
and to your sweet drug I'm still loyal.
Though the high I once felt,
is replaced with chilling sorrow.

It's all gone:
my security and health;
my happiness and warmth.
I shiver in your memory

I am broken. Collapsed.
Your hold on me cuts and tears and stabs and sears,
but it no longer heals.
This pain no medication may relieve.

All that remains is lost love,
here's to wishing it had never been found.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    I like this like the other ones...you could go far withy our poetry...you really know how to capture someones attention with your writing..you have a true gift..you make my writing look bad..lol

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh I just loved the second stanza. You wrote it so beautifully and it flowed effortlessly. The imagery here was effective and kept my attention. This was my fave of the two .. you really captured me in the beginning and blew me away in the end. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    You were my addiction,
    and to your sweet drug I'm still loyal.
    though the high I used to feel,
    is replaced with numbing sorrow.

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    thx for takin time to read my poem, wow lots of help there, I actually wrote it like that for a reason, when I write it's kinda like a diary, not meant to be correct or really structured. i'm torn between the then and now between two people. not that a reader knows that. but I do :) when I get some time to breathe here ill fix it up and add a bunch to it. thanks again!

  • 16 years ago

    by ALEX

    Almost scary, it's so sad. I like the metaphor you used. Def. adding you as a favorite.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jade

    This an amazing poem.

    Keep it up buddie.

    Jadee.

    :)

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