In the Wave of All That's Passed

by TamborineMan   Aug 22, 2007


His eyes move with a slow shiver,
They feel the chill of his soul.

In stillness, the water ripples,
to dampen a heart grown cold.

His mind's forlorn abandon,
composes a melody in discord
To the beat, his feet do shuffle,
all things, but the river, ignored

Along the slim bank, he wanders
as the darkened heavens pass by.
His heart and eyes resist him,
in the calm of the night, he cries.

Sky above, stirs with thunder.
Earth below, littered with moors.
Despair drowns all desire.
Lonely tears wed murky shores.

Though his eyes no longer tremble,
to the tune, his feet still roar.

Unto the fields, he does surrender,
where his heart shall beat no more.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    I loved this...i could feel the emotion put into this...it caputred my attention really fast..i loved it great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I love the imagery your painted in your beginning two lines. It captured my attention and I was eager to read more. The words you used fit the mood of the poem perfectlly and the flow you created was just flawless. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Corey Singleton

    Good work

  • 16 years ago

    by ALEX

    Impressive! Rhyming is close to perfect. Love the vocab. Here in there the wording took a few tries for me to read it right. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Lovely.
    Nice vocabulary
    that was probably my favorite part
    your words were interesting
    and they certainly got my attention
    flow was pretty good
    everything seemed to go together
    I'm not really seeing any mistakes that
    I can point out
    keep writing
    5/5
    kaila

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