by Lonely Little Dreamer Aug 22, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
A puppet master with strings made of words, |
I loved the idea for this poem and the metaphores were wonderful very unique not anywhere close to some of the other bland metahores that I've read on this site before. The things that I can say that would make this poem a bit better would be if you fixed the last line. For some reason I belive that it doesnt fit as well. I think that its because a mascuarade is a masked ball not something that can be played, and I know that its a metaphore but it just sort of throw the whole poem off. Nice job as a whole though. |
Excellent poem! i love it. you wrote it so well, even tho it didnt rhyme its still a really good poem. 5/5 keep up the great work. |
by Ingrid
A well penned piece, strong wording and emotions. You are a great writer! |
by Stephanie
I love this. |
by GoodMEMORIES
I could picture this all in my head.. I love the way that you describe yourself in your poems. this poem really sucked me in |