Tears Fall Without Reason

This was a very blunt poem. Sometimes that works, but I think this one would be better if you added more.. mystery. Try metaphors or similes. Your word choice was pretty simple, maybe try to spice it up a bit?

I know a lot of people can relate to this, I know I can, but it just seems like venting. If that's was it was great, if not try my suggestions. x]

----------> Am I afraid of happiness?
Or do I love being sad?
I'm sure that must be it,
Because sorrow is all I've ever had.
`` I love when the poet questions themselves. "Or do I love being sad?", that line just stuck with me, because I've often asked myself this question. It seems strange though to like being sad, I guess it's because it's all you know, and maybe you don't like change. I don't know.. that question has always rattled my mind.

----------> These tears will always fall,
I'll never live a normal life.
If I want to smile,
I know I'll have to strife.
`` I feel like you tried to rhyme just a little too hard in this stanza. When you write a rhyming poem, make sure to re-read it out loud to make sure the flow is good, and nothing seems forced or awkward.

----------> But once that smile comes,
I fear it will quickly disappear.
Tears will continue to fall,
Without reason, they'll always be here.
`` Such a sad ending to a sad poem. It's a heart wrenching thought to think you'll be sad forever, that not a single moment in time will be a happy one. I've been there and felt that.

Overall, I liked this poem, because I could relate so well, but it could be a bit more.. poetic, if that makes sense. Good job! x]

Keep writing!
Cayce

The only thing that I could find needing to be fixed with this poem would again be the grammar... "don`t" and "doesn`t" . Other than that, I loved it. The lines could be a little bit longer to give the reader more room to relate because it is a very personal poem which is fine because what poem isn`t? But giving a little more description could give it that little extra umph. Great job though, I like your work.

5.5
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Not your best, but sad none the less. you do have talent, and i loved this poem, because it was sad and had some good lines.
love Tara-Kay
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It isn't bad but it isn't the best poem that I read... It has some excellent lines but it needs some improving!

I can relate strongly to this poem and im sure most people could but well done
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