You caught my heart on this one.. though i guess, just like what the person above me stated, the last line doesn't fit that well coz it's long though it's not really a bg deal for me..by the way, i love the simplicty on this one. i think some people could relate on this one. well that's life there's no such thing as constant happiness..

This is really goood x

Another good piece of poetry..
It was penned just beautifully...
I think I know where your coming from in this poem...
But anyways, The flow was really good through out the whole thing..
&& The wording was just incredible...
Enjoyable Read...

5/5

This is definetly one of my favorites!! it explains how i feel at times :[ i loveee it! great job! 5/5 for sure.

I can relate to this one. Greatly written with excellent flow and good rhymes. My favorite stanza is:
-Am I afraid of happiness?
Or do I love being sad?
I'm sure that must be it,
Because sorrow is all I've ever had.-
All of your poems sound sincere, and that makes them very effective and touching.

Hmm i believe every tear falls has a reason! well i like the message coz i can relate some of the lines... i touch my heart.. just keep on writing 5/5

This poem is so sad.
I like the emotion depicted in
the writing. I can almost relate
what I have felt at times for it.
It's quite an amazing piece, nicely
flowing in sync.

The consecutive rhymes are really cool. The flow is good plus the content is very cohesive. Keep up the good work 5/5

Tc
Fsams

I can relate strongly to this poem and im sure most people could but well done
xx

It isn't bad but it isn't the best poem that I read... It has some excellent lines but it needs some improving!

Not your best, but sad none the less. you do have talent, and i loved this poem, because it was sad and had some good lines.
love Tara-Kay
x

The only thing that I could find needing to be fixed with this poem would again be the grammar... "don`t" and "doesn`t" . Other than that, I loved it. The lines could be a little bit longer to give the reader more room to relate because it is a very personal poem which is fine because what poem isn`t? But giving a little more description could give it that little extra umph. Great job though, I like your work.

5.5
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This was a very blunt poem. Sometimes that works, but I think this one would be better if you added more.. mystery. Try metaphors or similes. Your word choice was pretty simple, maybe try to spice it up a bit?

I know a lot of people can relate to this, I know I can, but it just seems like venting. If that's was it was great, if not try my suggestions. x]

----------> Am I afraid of happiness?
Or do I love being sad?
I'm sure that must be it,
Because sorrow is all I've ever had.
`` I love when the poet questions themselves. "Or do I love being sad?", that line just stuck with me, because I've often asked myself this question. It seems strange though to like being sad, I guess it's because it's all you know, and maybe you don't like change. I don't know.. that question has always rattled my mind.

----------> These tears will always fall,
I'll never live a normal life.
If I want to smile,
I know I'll have to strife.
`` I feel like you tried to rhyme just a little too hard in this stanza. When you write a rhyming poem, make sure to re-read it out loud to make sure the flow is good, and nothing seems forced or awkward.

----------> But once that smile comes,
I fear it will quickly disappear.
Tears will continue to fall,
Without reason, they'll always be here.
`` Such a sad ending to a sad poem. It's a heart wrenching thought to think you'll be sad forever, that not a single moment in time will be a happy one. I've been there and felt that.

Overall, I liked this poem, because I could relate so well, but it could be a bit more.. poetic, if that makes sense. Good job! x]

Keep writing!
Cayce