I really liked this poem to tell you the truth, it seemed to flow nicely to me I didn't see it go off at all within places. The ending line was really effective definitly my favorite part of this piece was how you ended it. The emotins qre quite deep within this they were held together strongly by a great word choice. An interesting piece you have here. Well done deserves a 5/5 ~mel

First i love the first stanza and the last three stanzas.. from the beginning you successfully expressed the vivid emotion and successfully retain that 'til the very last line in the last stanza. the imagination and the chosen words were great it, flowed smoothly!

Amazing, great title and an excellent first stanza, I loved your vocabulary and your lines flowed like a river. Great work, keep it up.

Wonderful expression of your emotions