by LovelyDivine Aug 23, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
new love
Lay Your World on Me -Ozzy Osbourne |
by Adelle
It's not the best I have read from you it didn’t have the flow or rhythm that I know you can give a poem. |
I'm unsure if I like it or not, however there's some nice techniques and wording. I can't quite put my finger on it but there just seems to be something missing, the emotion is portrayed pretty well and the message is good. |
It simple which is good it helped out the flow! but something is missing i dont know what but still good job! |
It's an original poem, I love the way it's written. It has good emotions, and a good message. Keep it up!! |
by Nix
I don't like it. Sorry but I really don't like it. You could express emotions better and this poem should be deeper. |