Oh wow i really dont know how you come up with these ideas for poems. lol. i voted this one a 4 because it wasnt one of you rbest but still keep up the good work :]

This is really good, how do you think this is funny? Lol, well I thought it was fantastic. You're words were good, not great. Could be more original, but it was still good. I loved the flow and the story behind it. (I pictured this either in a 7 eleven, or a bank) this was really well written.

Very interesting. You created very intense atmosphere through the piece, and the twist at the ending is really powerful and effective. You described emotions in the poem very well.

I liked it, probably because it was simple. It flowed well and you created a good piece
love Tara-Kay
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Hmm very rhyming,,, i think it written well.. nice ending 5/5

Great piece strong words good flow ending made it awesome! def 5/5

I think the poem can be made better by making the flow good. In this piece some lines have a different flow(long sentences). Overall this a good piece.

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I think the capital "BANG" maes it funnay, but otherwise this is such a very sad poem 5/5

This isn't the greatest but it isn't that bad either. It doesn't flow smoothly but it is somewhat satisfactory likely from the simplicity of this piece. Some interesting imagery and the word choice was good but could probably be better.
~Faith-less

Interesting I agree its sorta funny too. flow broke up a bit in the 3rd stanza but you recovered nicely. A change from I Usually read good job! 5

Imagery is fantastic and this poem has powerful atmosphere. Very original and interesting, 5/5

I love the way you write! Niice job!=]

Brooke<3

It rhymes so well, the flow, the thoughts, the start and the end was great..uhm im just giving my view..use some deep words and more emotional..and one more thing you really grab my attention and that makes yoy so talented..its true honestly^^

Quite a simple piece here. I liked the situation you placed yourself in. Imagery was great you created such an intense feeling within the atmosphere of this poem. The flow was smoothe and quite chant like. Yeah some parts of this seem quite amusing your right with that but not a bad piece overall. Well done. ~Mel

Thats sooo intense... it sounds like something out of a movie, curious though how did you mange to get into the mood to write this... it sounds sooo real, did you kill someone... jk lol

I dont concider this sad, more like twisted but there's no catagory for twisted. lol.
5/5

This was an interesting piece. The beginning was so. .alluring. and it hooked me right away. The ending was good too, but and it got kinda funny, yeah. But still, this piece was. .intense. :] 5/5.