You lied

DAMN grl all i can say is i feel u 2 da fullest in diz poem i went thro dat 2...........check mine out and comment for me plz!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow! wot an original piece, really really good, short and simple, i loved the repetition of words it worked really well.

Well done

5/5

Gary

The anger in this is felt from beginning to end. it radiates from each and every word and that made the whole piece very powerful. i didn't like the amount of fillers you used (I, you, and etc) i thought it disrupted the flow a little. however i liked the repetition of "You lied" i thought it managed to get your point across very well withotv being overbearing. nicely done.

I liked this, but the repetition was annoying me by the end. I like repeats being used in poetry, but only to an extent.

The emotion of anger and hurt was strongly conveyed. Well done.

Ooo. I like this one a lot.
It portrayed your hurt and anger very well.
The thing I like the most was the repetition of "You Lied". It just helps add to the emotions. Beautifully done. :) Overall: 5.5

-- Stephanie Lynn .+.