Uhm the beginning of this is a little interesting, but i like the ending of it and that the message gets across. nice job.

I love how people might first look at it and be like: this isn't a poem. But then you read it and by the end it's a powerful poem. I like how it rhymes at the very end. I usually connect more with poems that rhyme so I thought it was a nice touch. Good job Bunny.

~Panda