Hey!
This poems gr8 the emotion comes thru relly well!

Keep on Writing

tc, Aisha
x

Great poem!! WOW ur really great in writting poems!! 25 minutes? I guess it will take me days!!

Very nice poem!

As always it is a fine written piece, it flowed nicely, good job. I think you used the right words for each line. I have some suggestion.

She is (like) a bottomless bit,
Broken into a million pieces... < so the reader can linger on her emotions

As i look over her,
^^ Just capitalize the I :)

I can see that you've really improve, keep up the good work! :)

5/5 from me.

It's a good poem. Keep it up.

Good lesson for that girl whoever she is and for all of us too.haha I love it... Brilliant piece of work.. 5/5

Good stuff

Hi !
very good poem , really think its very good
:) its full of emoticons; but very mysterious .. It leaves the writer behind with many questions.
But very good job ;
Keep up the good work
love it
:) Sarah x

Life is cruel but also valuable,
So treat it with respect and others,
Keep it near your heart.

i love ur that message and i dont agree w/
lauren that it was pritty good i thought it was very great! keep up ur talent and i love the flow

Love the concept, and i like the way her live's been described. Pretty good ^^

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Yeah, of course these people are between us. Take heed of our ways to not become them.

well described.

It's very good. It really makes you think.
I like that.

It was very sad poem. and i enjoyed after reading you poem 5/5

Well done. Heartless, and no soul lead me to think that she's a bad person, rather than a person in need, and I'm not sure that's what you meant, but other than that, it's a really well written, and deeply meaningful peom. Well done. xx

I think it would sound better as a spoken word poem said aloud it was a good poem but i feel you could have done alot better with this!

Might of only took 25 mins katy, but its very good very correct when you say life is valueable, i liked it very much 4/5

Hey the poem is great keep up the good work.
iwould be greatfull if u can look at mine and vote and comment many thanks mel xx

As i look over her,
She sits waiting for tears to roll down her cheeks,
"Nothing happens,
Emotionless,
She looks in the mirror,
Wondering where it all went so wrong", I see these feelings being expressed in alot of poems. Keep on writing.

Very good poem hunn you have such a valuable lesson built into it 5/5 : ) <33

A very powerful and inspiring message within your words.... well done once again Katy