WOW! This is so short and yet so very powerful. Being a victem off domestic violence makes this piece scream out to me.

In a way it is as though I just relived the ten years of abuse and I am left shaking all over again.

When someone can write something that takes a person literally into their past then you know that it is written extremely well.

I cannot say that I like this piece because of the memories that suddenly haunt me all over again, but I can say that you have done an outstanding job!

--Sher

This poem is amazing! The detail and imagery in it is outstanding. Almost like the reader(me) were there watching the whole thing, if that makes any sense to you. Either way this is a very powerful poem. Keep up the good work.
5/5
*Brittney

WOW...this was very intense.. the violence and anger made me focus on the poem completely..

great flow and just a wonderful job on this one.5/5

Hey i really love this poem
wery , very deep
i would not call this this sweet but its very poewerful

I loved the end, the beggining didn't make much sense to me at first til I got there but overall you created a very fine piece! keep up the good work 4/5

I liked it, but I felt like the lines could have had a little more description in them to help the reader full see what is going on. The imagery was great and did help me, but a little more description would make it better so that the end isn`t just thrown in there and so sudden.

But, the imagery, wording and flow were all very good.

5.5
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