Awww...this was very very sweet. Your opening stanza is good. I like your word choice throughout the piece. It helps it not sound cliche or cheesy...like "velvet touch" or "sneaky sexy grin". Good job! And yes, I'd love your comments on my work. Whatever appeals to you. And you can be completely honest as to whether you did or did not like it!
Thanks a ton. Looking forward to more from you!
*ME*