It is like there is a hidden mesage in side really beautifull 5/5

A beautiful rendition of emotion, shown through and expressed in the moon and stars. Great work. Love always, Greta.

Really Beautiful poem wth emotions of a sad heart...
Keep up the good work.

God bless u

SO mucH efficienT writinG. you'vE alwayS gooD aT youR joB. dE expressioN giveN herE iS verY mucH amazinG anD feelinG betteR tO reaD anD commenT...

theN 'A' gradE oN diS poeM iS possiblE, yoU deservE.... reallY yoU deservE. i aM prouD oN youR writinG aS welL aS oN youR preciouS feelingS towarD minE anD nazeeR's writingS.

thX 4 writinG anD keepinG uS iN pleasurE...

diS iS..... luzaN

Wow u sure do have a good knack for writin such gr8 poetry..i dont know wot it was bout this poem but it had me right form the get go!!....the flow imagery was brilliant!!
keep it up
bree

In the earth there is another broken star
from the people eye, he is not so far
who is he?
I am

I love the end...perfect and beautiful.

I really like the way that you compare yourself to the broken star. That is very unique and talented.

Ironically, it is the broken stars hat draw our attention to the beuty more than the "perfect" stars, or at least in my mind.

This was actually quiet good. It leaves so much open for the reader to imagine and that is always a good thing.

--Sher

Hmm it was awesome! one thing i dont understand why it seems u got a lower rates.. well i can say the effort of this poet, actually i enjoyed how u express ur feelings about the star. it has a great message and there is a meaning that i can figure out. commencing in the first word it really interesting to read,up to the end. i think u deserve to get 5/5

Beautiful and mysterious, delightful read. Interesting and different from usual poems. I enjpyed it very much, the ending was quite a suprise but I get the meaning. 5 for you, my suggestion would be punctuation throughout as you started capitalizing and stopped midway through the poem.

Deep and beautiful... Loved the ending...
It was...unexpected...
A wonderful poem, to shorten it up...

keep going
*isabel*

Hassan
What a excellent job you have done on this piece.

a broken star in earth, In his life
he lived far from his moonlight
he has broken now

Tne imagery here is great. Very heartfelt.
Take care Cindy

Well written, this poem is absoutly great, the emotion and feeling in this emotion is amazing
xx

Thumhaara poem bura nehin hai. Lekin mey yaqeen ke saath kehethaahoon thumme potential hai isko flawless bananeka. HE HE TC good work

tc
FSAMS

Beautiful...
I like concept.. how you compared a broken star with yourself... very unique...

"he never thought, one day he had to break
A broken shining star was leaving his place
leaving the space, he was falling down
very soon for the world, to be shown "

^^Simple beautiful lines...

good work..

Wow this is an amazing poem :)
5/5!

I really liked how you used the shining star as a metaphore.. I like the poem but at times it was hard to follow so I had to read it twice.. But it is a really good poem.. :)

1st stanza

i love the opening line it adds a but of mystery to the poem and its quiet musical.
changes:
come near 'the' moon
He was hoping, he will go near, soon- 'he was hoping to go there soon'

2nd stanza
Same as the tiny white flowers
- you could do- some as tiny as pale white flowers.

3rd stanza-
he had to break
- he would break

4th stanza
'the' sharpness..

5th stanza
the final destination was not so far
now very close to this world jar
he has lost every hope
and was inside the earth globe
- this doesn't work so because it doesn't make sense sorry.

6th
a story is not end,- this story is not the end
their place's

7th
everyone 'will' see the broken stars
nobody in the world will see
you don't need the last line of this

8th
he is broken now

9th
on this earth
people's eye

overall this was na interesting little poem there was a great deal of imagery but you need make these changes or it wouldn't make sense.

Beautifully written 5/5