Oooooh thats deliciously dark. You have such great topics, and mood, and imagery! Soo much to lap up and savour.

Well, i suppose i agree with the person above, though i dont think id use words that sound like they belong on an advertisement for food, but that was beautiful, it had perfect pace, flow, and the imagery was phenomenal, gud job

The imagery was good bro. I watched the dance LOL!! good job.