You could make it a little bit longer, but it is still great with a lot of emotions behind it. Its greatest power lies in its simplicity. You have a lot of talent.
I like the form of this one a lot, the amazing effect add lines:
-I see-
and
-I feel-
because they make whole rhythm of the poem very unique.
5/5 from me

Thank you so much.
I know that it's rather short, but I like it.