Ok..i knw poems dont have to rhyme..but poetry that rhymes is my favorite! lol..this poem has some rhyming..even though it wasnt rhyming the whole time it really stood out tome..it was soo perfect..especially how u so cleverly pieced everything together like how u kept saying but you dont know! jose...it was amazing..i really really loved it..and i knw that soooo many ppl can relate to it..especially me!! lol..(((Angel)) lol..he still hasnt called!! lol and its gonna be 10pm soon lol..o well..but really..it was a beautiful poem..its like i felt connected to the character in the poem..like he loves this girll soo much even if she doesnt love him bak..like that anxious and hopeful feeling that one day maybe one day she will..hey add me to ur fav authors! i will do the same! lol..k ttyl..text me!!

This was really great! and i agree with the whole rhyming thing, but this poem - just because of the message and the feel of the poem, it doesnt need to all rhyme. it grabbed my attention, and i think there WILL be many of people who can relate to it, whether they feel that way towards someone or someone feels like that about them.

amazing job!
-Em ♥

I like this poem. Excellent wording and it has a somewhat good rhythm but great flow. I think you should put it in stanzas because of the repetition you have in the poem. On these two lines:

"I'll still always love you
I'll still always be here"

You should take of the word 'still' I read it without and it sounded a lot better. Great job on this one. Keep it up!

Hey
thanks for your comment
i love this poem
can relate to it heaps as he other comments above say
keep up the great work!
xx

Luv it good job...your talented..keep writing

LOVE IT!!