My Feelings For Her

Walk of a shore, with you could be great.
Midnight moon, depth of silence, wish I could take you to my worlds' bay.
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perfect opening! The first line could appear to be a bit cliche, but it's beautiful and girls like romanticism, right? ;)

To your pain I felt, from your pleasure I claim.
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I think you should not write "pain" before "pleasure" and invert the phrase, because after the very good opening in which you describe a magical place, it makes a too hard contrast with this new line... But I am not expert in poetry, it's only my opinion lol

You may oppose me; I'll ask you the same.
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I don't understand the meaning... sorry. It's probably my lack of English knowledge

Dawn of New Year, you made my day.
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gorgeous!

Seeing your laugh, I felt the moment on heavens highway.
Breath in my soul, felt your presence.
Angels are rare, felt you as one.
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nothing better than a reference to heavens, it shows how great are love feelings, well done! I like how you use the word "angel" without making directly the easy comparison "her = angel"

Heard a lot about beauty, but realized it's you.
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hehe, I had an idea of a phrase of this kind for my future poem, but I thought It would be too cliche... You confirm me it's not, it's well integrated, so thank you :P

Every thought of my happiness, wished to be you.
Though my words are few, my heart, it's true.
Million streets across, it's beating for you.
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If I were a girl, sure I'd fall in love with you lol

Good job! 5/5

I liked this poem..
it was cute and sweet!
nice job

<3 dominique

Whole cracker that was good