The flow was a little rocky- but that could have been the way I was reading it. However in the end the emotion's won.
This peice was so sweet, it was heart warming:)
You really portrayed the emotion's in this stanza..

[You slept so soundly
While I lay awake by your side
Listening to your breathing
Wishing you were awake to watch the sun rise with me
Not wanting to wake you, for you slept so peacefully
That perfect moment is where I want to be]

*I remember my boyfriend fell asleep on the phone- He was so tired from the day and couldn't stay awake- I didn't want to hang up on him, I couldn't cause I was captured by how soundly he slept.

Much enjoyable,
and very well done,
5/5 Elly.

This was beautifully written, so cute and adorable. You really did this well, some parts didnt flow so well but you ended with such awesome lines.
love Tara-Kay

Very beautiful and extremely enjoyable. A treat to read. the flow was great and the feeling expressed throughout was nice. keep up the good work 5

Such a beautiful write. Wonderfully written and a enjoyable read. The flow was okay but could of been better. I loved your word choice as well.

Keep it up!

-Shannon <3

Aww.... so sweet!! paints such a beautiful picture! i can't count the number of times i've stayed away and just listened to my bf's breathing. you really captured the emotions well. Kudos!

*Sigh*

Awwww Kaff!! so cute!! i just wanna hug you!! call me!

"You slept so soundly
While I lay awake by your side
Listening to your breathing"

That was like me last night. You manage to put so much emotion in this.. it was beautiful
5/5
*Gem*

Wow! so beautiful and vivid.
very heart warming

This poem was gr8 and it truelly did warm my heart specially the lines
while i lay awake by your side
listening to your breathing...

i think i speak for everyone when i say that that was probably the best part of your poem:D
keep it up
bree

WOW i like this one... really a good and brilliant poem... keep up...

Thats real poetry. 5/5

This is a very wonderful poem...keep up the good work and i'm glad you liked my poem!!!
on a scale from 1to5 i give you a 5 for excellence

sicerely,
~cutiepie~

Wow, so beautiful and sweet,
indeed perfect moment we all wish to be in
well done and nice job