Wow, wow, wow! This is such a amazing poem. I can't express how much this poem deserves to be in the weekly contest. 5/5

Well I think the last line is suppose to be live or die..but im not sure. Anywho. The poem was really good and the flow rocked. I liked the bit of metaphors you used. The emotion was also definitely present. Great Job and Keep it up!

This poem left me speechless. Amazing write. Very powerful. You conveyed your emotions wonderfully. The flow was absolutely perfect.

p.s. Spelling mistake in the last line. Should be "live or die" not "live of die". 5/5

Take Care!

-Shannon <3

This poem left me speechless. Amazing write. Very powerful. You conveyed your emotions wonderfully. The flow was absolutely perfect.

p.s. Spelling mistake in the last line. Should be "live or die" not "live of die". 5/5

Take Care!

-Shannon <3

Wow this is an amazing poem, the grammar and wording are excellent. the feeling and emotion is overwhelming

well done

Nice structure and choice of words. Again, a tiny hint of mystery, I like that in your poems.

I enjoyed this piece, but it could have flowed a little smoother for me, it can be hard to tell because I might not read it the same as you would, it was a good job though, nice work.

Excellent poem for me. I loved the wording and the way you have written it. The rhymes are poetic and it great:)

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