Comments : A Betraying Friend. [Collab]

  • 17 years ago

    by Deana

    It is so hard to watch a situation like this,not much loyalty in the world I`m afraid,good job on the poem,very heartfelt.

  • 17 years ago

    by Miranda

    Wow.Congradulations to the both of you.I really loved this poem.It flowed very well and was deep in heartfelt emotions.A 5/5 for sure.Can't wait for the next one.
    -miranda

  • 17 years ago

    by TwiztidJuggalette

    Now that was deep...and held alot of emotions. you guys did a great job on this piece. The flow was just amazing and everything just fitted perfect..Great Job...

    You guys deserve a 5...

  • 17 years ago

    by Veamm

    So sad and so emotional..it reminds of my friend who did it too to me..well of course it turned me down..i felt that im so useless..just sharing..ok..i dont what to say it was so great..two thumbs..5/5 for it..keep it up..^^

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    You two has done a great job, i really loved the topic and how it flew after it.

    keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalee

    Trust me i know what it is like to have a "friend" that you are worried would take the guy you like away from you. anyway, this is an amazing poem. it is once again an amazingly written poem. you deffineterly put a lot of emotion into your poems. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 17 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    A couple grammar mistakes and the flow was rough in spots, but I like the subject matter and the feelings behind it. Nice piece of work.

  • 17 years ago

    by MakeBelieveLove

    I've been in that kinda situation, and it hits close to home. It was moving, almost brought me to tears of memory. But thats another thing in itself, but it takes a great writer to do that. Great Job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Aaron Deevers

    Beautiful, I can take this to heart in a way. love this one. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was lovely, so sad, yet powerful and
    really well written. A great collab, my friend
    Love Tara-Kay
    x

  • 17 years ago

    by Kayla

    WOW, Elaine! This is such a beautiful poem! You and Marlanna always do a great job together! The words were just simply amazing and nothing less. I also loved how you rhymed up everything and made it all go together perfectly! The poem was flawless and you did a great job!! 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

    ~Kayla~

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I frikken love that last stanza, so beautiful and moving, as was the whole piece.
    Despite being so sad, it was beautifully written, great job to both of you!

  • 17 years ago

    by Shauna

    Excellent Poem! Both of you did very well!!

    5.5**
    <33

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    A sad piece written beautifully. The rhyme and flow were flawless throughout the entire poem. 5/5
    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    You two did a really good job together
    I had read the first one too and liked it too
    My fave lines are;

    Your only but a dream now,
    Almost from my reach,
    I need to feel your warmth,
    Or I'm going to screech.

    Keep it up hun,
    Laura

  • 17 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    That was phenomenal the emotion was sooo strong! again keep up the great work

  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    I can definately relate to this, as many people would be able to. It was such a simple poem, yet filled with a lot of emotion. A very enjoyable read. I've never done a collab before, but I bet it's fun. Well done. :]
    5/5

    Tammie

  • 17 years ago

    by Blissful

    Now this is something I could really relate too. The emotions you spoke of are ones I am familar with. The flow was kinda rocky and things seemed forced but the feelings were real. *4/5*