I think this is fantastic. The form reminds me of how songs should be written. The over all flow is lovely there are some parts that seem longer and out of place but that always happen, you cant fit what you want to say into a small enough space. So i understand. Over all i loved this poem, its not hard to figure out but it takes some brain power, which i love so see. I think you are extremely talented and I get what your saying. I once dated this guy and once he left me all his friends and my friends kinda shunned me as if i were nothing with out him and i really miss some of their friendships.
I get from the poem that your trying to find yourself. good luck to you and to everyone else out there looking for who they truely are. You are braver than most :)