War

by firexdancer   Sep 3, 2007


The broken colors of a battlefield,
the hungry children in the street;
Blood smothering his ragged smile.
--People that you'll never meet

Cover your eyes, oh, my children;
Shield your ears and hold your breath.
Turn away from those gunshots
rejoice when they can finally rest.

Crackling of an old tv;
The harsh news spewing on the line.
You can't run away forever.
There's no place to hide, this time.

This once had been a paradise.
Hush my darling, don't you cry;
Pay no attention to the screams outside;
It's not yet your turn to fly.

Fake smiles plastered everywhere.
Keep pretending there's nothing wrong.
Even eyes do not betray
the bleeding of their song.

Oh, my darlings, come and play,
Hold your hands and sing;
For if you never take the chance
it won't be laughter that rings.

With guilt eating at their souls
--eyes as black, as cold as dust;
Please just take the blame and stop this war
before we're stripped of every trust.

So hush my darling, don't you cry.
Listen to the dripping tears.
Let the water take you somewhere else,
Where everyone's not consumed by fear.

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edited by i'd take a bullet for you

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  • 17 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    Emotionally vivid.
    This poem was very sad, and yet so true, it had tears coming to my eyes.
    My heart sped with each word, emphazing there meaning.
    It has a lasting impression on the reader, making for an inspirational read.

    Excellent job hun:)
    --Elly.

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    I really like this one, it holds a lot of emotions and I could felt them like my own. Greatly written, I like every stanza, you should be proud on this one. Excellent job, 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Wow.. i dont know what to say. the meaning, the message, its powerful. 55

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Sad and yet wonderfully written poem. It's, at least to me, much more enjoyable to read now that it's edited. I like your expressions, and the mystique of who you are talking to.

    And original, unique poem that, although not too embellished, which you should work on but is not necessary, works perfectly as a statement towards the anti-war/peace movement, or at least, so it seems.

    Since I edited it, it seems fine =] The syllabication is wonderful, although I didn't really play around with that at all, and I know where to pause and where to go on =]

    In all honesty, I think the only thing I would have said, had I not edited it, would be to correct the punctuation =]

    Well done all on your own, m'dear, even without me =]

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

    (send me more, i'll get them done =])

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