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by Aaron Deevers Sep 3, 2007 category : Sadness, depression / other
Here I am standing in this rain Just standing not caring what's happening In the middle of this road that leads to nowhere A road that once led to your heart Now all this road does is stop at a cliff A cliff that I'm ready to jump off of We had it all A great relationship and a kid on the way You turn all that down for drugs Killing my child our child I have hate inside me towards you I also have forgiveness too Only if you were to stop and look at what you did Once I jump I will not have this hate or forgiveness To give you anymore One last look back to se if you are there waiting for me Noticing you are not As I lean forward I hear a voice A voice telling me to stop But it's to late I've jumped She had came back but she was to late She loss two lives that she loved She loss our kid and now me I hope that this will change your life Your life for the best
by Crystal Gaze
I really liked this one. It was full of heartfelt emotion's, and really touched my heart. The flow was good, and but the concept amazing. 'We had it all A great relationship and a kid on the way You turn all that down for drugs Killing my child our child' ^For this I think it would flow better, if you change it too this... [We had it all A great relationship and a kid on the way You turn all that down for drugs Killing our child] or put a pause in there. Still a good peice. 4/5 Elaine.