A very exquisite piece of literature. A sad but great poem. i love the mataphors and how you flowed quite easily through the verses, 5/5

Really good. the imagery was great. good work.

This had some lovely imagery and vocab choice and seemed to flow so smoothly it was like watching it play out on the screen.
However, I feel that the rhythm and pace became a bit lost in the middle but managed to pick itself up with the ending lines.
The title is imaginative and quite original.

Absolutely love this one. The flow was flawless and the vocab supurb. The details and descriptions created the clearest imagery as I read this piece. I could imagine every scene happening as you wrote, and I read it.
I love the concept, and especially the title and idea that the dream shatters everytime she wakes.
Every is perfect about this poem. Very well done.
5/5

Tammie :]

I really love your choice of words, the imagery in this poem is really good, well done. It was a long poem but It was a beautiful piece.