The Girl of my Dreams

by Daniel Milano   Sep 6, 2007


My shore condo is real sweet,
i gotta pool, deck,an its two blocks from the beach,
but nothing compares to all the friends that i meet,
theres Tim, V, Justin and Dee
they've been good friends of mine for as long as can be,
but u see theres this one girl
who makes my heart beat faster when i walk past her
I'm nervous, when i speak its a jumbled disaster,
so bad its ugly, like a crash on Nascar,
my voice has more cracks then a smashed plate,
it needs plaster, generally I'm smooth, when it comes to conversations I'm the master,
but since she,
cast her spell on me
all Ive been thinking lately is,
if love was a felony,
id be behind bars for twenty to life
Cuz passion seemingly just fell on me
i can only tell the truth when my paper and pencil meet,
Cuz i think I'm madly in love with a girl from the shore
known to me as sweet Emily!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Katie

    I like how you used poetry to tell a story and the setting is very nice.
    Some lines, I noticed, don't rhyme, but that's fine.
    I would find it more interesting if you added some symbols, possibly a symbolic meeting if Emily. Also, more imagery would, in my opinion, make the reader feel your emotions more. One example in my head is that line where you mention how smooth you usually are; I was thinking about rewording to say that your conversations flow like the ocean.
    Also, even noting details that don't directly relate to your message could expand your piece like noting the sun when you first see her to represent your passion.

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