Very touching, I can feel the emotion from this poem.

I needs to be capitalized

The third stanza was powerful. :)

The sixth stanza was a very interesting image. To me it sounds almost like a self pitty thing. You just do care anymore so you just do that to distract yourself from everything that has been going on. I want to be in the film industry and it really reminds me of what a character I created does. He get's one of those lawn chairs that you can lay out on at the beach and by the pool and lies out on it when it rains. Just staring at the sky with his arms out. Woo! Claps* You did the right through! Lol. :) Very good poem. Emotional. 5.

Mm. Lovely. I liked the bit about the shower a lot. This piece oozes many raw emotions. It's very relatable to those in similar situations. Nicely penned. Very real.

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

A very nice song with a very bold meaning. The flow, rhyming and structure are excellent. Keep it up :)

Oh i'm so sorry that this happens.
it was a very good piece, very truth telling, and the imagery that come from your words is amazing. very nicely set out and i
love it. 5/5

This was so heartbreaking to read..and yet so wonderfully written at the same time.

The emotion and depth you put into this piece were lovely, overwhelming but without being overbearing, and so easily felt by the reader.

So many people will be able to relate to this piece, and that's what makes a wonderful poem.

Very good poem the flow and structure was pretty good. The rhyme was descent but I felt at some times you might have been forcing the rhymes. The overall poem was good though. Good job.

Is this told from both sides? I wonder, I'm terrible at interpreting, but i think it is a parent and siblings but i could be wrong, either way it was interesting looking from a parents perspective.

This is very good. parents don't think that we suffer because of them. but while we suffer the younger ones have it worse, and their goes our childhood while we try to give them theirs.
-tania
5/5