This one kinda confused me.. but i read it again and got it! its different, but this kinda different is good! i liked how you did the repetition of the first line, it really fit! good job! :o]

This would sound cool at a poetry slam, :) and yeah it's different but really good :)

This is a little hard to follow, but at the end i got it...this is really meaningful, i like how you wrote this, like your telling a story... great job... 5/5