You Didnt Care.

by Jaime   Sep 8, 2007


I remember when I was small,
I would always stay right beside you,
All you cared about was baseball.
But mommy said to take care of me.

Mommy packed and left,"take care"
I was twelve years old.
You started to swear.
You never paid any attention.

I started to cry and cry.
Wanting a look from my brother.
You were away getting high.
You said I was the worst sister.

That hurts, my brother.
That really hurt that you don't care.
I want to go and tell my mother.
and tell her you don't care about me.

But mommy's not here anymore.
Now your gone getting drunk.
You never said I love you before.
I'm in my bedroom with a belt.

I don't wanna live anymore
Your away sniffling cocaine.
I got up and shut the door.
Opened the closet, getting ready.

I left a note in case you do care.
Of what would happen next.
I jumped off the chair.
and saw myself go to the light.

You came to my bed.
Wanting to give me a beating.
But you instead, saw me dead.
I hope you understand.

You were once my hero.
But you didn't care at all.

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  • 17 years ago

    by ihrtschlepper

    Soo sad.
    the structure is gaad and its vry emotional...
    good story- like

  • 17 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Wow this is really great. I can relate to the emotion. I also love your word picking. 5/5 definitely!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by The Herald

    Hmmm ryming...seems...kinda...whats the word? forced? its pretty nice, the meter goes well with the choice of words (i mean the sylables) but, the words dont seem to ryme very much. was this intentional? or perhaps, a mistake? in any case, the poem tells a very emotional story, i can realy see the brother and mother "not caring" its a very nice piece of work, but although the subject IS emotional, im just not picking up that you actualy have had this happen, it sorta lacks emotion. anyway, heres my rating:

    9/10

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenna

    Very good, the emotions were very good, sad poem, but very good. keep it up.

    babygurl

  • 17 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    It was definitely emotional but didnt quite flow well. Such a sad poem and I thought it was still good. Keep up the good work.