Sad, sad, sad.. but why is this in friendship poems, it should be in sad poems.. but anyway i really like the flow of the poem and i thought that it was a great way to express emotion...

keep writing

It was definitely emotional but didnt quite flow well. Such a sad poem and I thought it was still good. Keep up the good work.

Very good, the emotions were very good, sad poem, but very good. keep it up.

babygurl

Hmmm ryming...seems...kinda...whats the word? forced? its pretty nice, the meter goes well with the choice of words (i mean the sylables) but, the words dont seem to ryme very much. was this intentional? or perhaps, a mistake? in any case, the poem tells a very emotional story, i can realy see the brother and mother "not caring" its a very nice piece of work, but although the subject IS emotional, im just not picking up that you actualy have had this happen, it sorta lacks emotion. anyway, heres my rating:

9/10

Wow this is really great. I can relate to the emotion. I also love your word picking. 5/5 definitely!!!

Soo sad.
the structure is gaad and its vry emotional...
good story- like