I eye a star tonight
I eye a person also
I eye a love one tonight

Too many I's and eyes lol Sorry it just did not read very good, I would change that up a bit and it is loved ones you mean I believe.

Other than that I thought it was pretty good, you could jazz it up a bit, but not a bad start.

The wording was a little confusing. I think if you revised this peice, it would read clearer.

Other than that, it is a beautiful theory, one that can not be proven, but is still beautiful too think.

4/5 Elaine.