Comments : Forget

  • 17 years ago

    by Miu

    Aww so sad, Through poem I kept thinking it's not a sad poem, but the last line just said everything. Very deep poem. Wording was amazing for me and flowed perfectly!
    5/5 Keep up!

  • 17 years ago

    by ali

    Wow, this is deep stuff, it flows so well and it's very honest
    it's like you've said all the things that i have been keeping inside
    really really good stuff
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    I often want to forget things... this poem was magnificant!no lie 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Eek, Your ending was..Eek.
    I love the last stanza, A lot.

    "I wish you knew half, of the spells that you cast
    Every shadow has your shape
    Every food has your taste
    You are my everything and there's no escape
    I just wish you could share the same fate"

    I go through every poem, Trying to pick out things I can offer advice on, Things I think can be improved. But when I got to your ending, I forget them all.

    Such a strong conclusion should have a strong poem above it.
    You seem to be venting, Now turn your vent into poetry.
    Work on the flow, and arrangement of your words.
    This has a lot of potential. :]

    I love the emotion and anger in it.

    Good work.