Comments : I ask

  • 17 years ago

    by pixie

    This is good but there's a typo
    other then that your a great writer

  • 17 years ago

    by KaKaSHi

    Great poem! kinda has the "woah" ending u know...
    a couple of things though
    "we must be beautiful and thin"
    i think it kinda kills the flow...maybe if u make it like this
    "we must be beautiful, we must be thin"
    it flows better....(in my opinion ofcourse...)
    anywho...a definite 5/5 from me....deep poem..=D

  • 17 years ago

    by I walked into my nightmares

    ^_^

  • 17 years ago

    by I walked into my nightmares

    Yess comments

  • 17 years ago

    by I walked into my nightmares

    Oooooooooo
    ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by sirusthevirus

    It a really good damn poem

    i like a lot.

    keep it up