The Night That Sees My Pain [Trijan Refrain]

by Twisted Heart   Sep 9, 2007


Perhaps, tonight I'll see the moon
Against the darkened sky
The orb may dance a wistful swoon
To tease and tantalize
A whisper breeze within the air
Lifts up my heart from love's despair
A whisper breeze
A whisper breeze
Come tend me with your loving care.

I see the stars, they shine so bright
Inside the blue cocoon
That wraps them with a gentle light
Against the glowing moon
Oh gentle stars do you not see
The pain that tears inside of me
Oh gentle stars
Oh gentle stars
Come stay my soul with sanity.

From depths too deep I try to rise
On dreams I try to hold
The tears that fall from saddened eyes
Have left me aged and cold
One night of love I try to find
But time has left my heart behind
One night of love
One night of love
Is but a thought inside my mind.

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The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line
at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.
The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8

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  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    Beautiful style. You asked me for my opinion about how well you executed it and I must say, you did a pretty good job. I had never heard of this form of poetry before but now I wanna try it because you did it so well lol. In other words, good write.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Jeannie
    This is so enchanting :) It just draws you right in....I right away shared it with my son's girlfriend and Nephew....my nephew I had to make him sit and listen...he is not much into poetry...to worried about cracking that next beer can open........this is just such a breathtakimg piece.

    From depths too deep I try to rise
    On dreams I try to hold
    The tears that fall from saddened eyes
    Have left me aged and cold
    One night of love I try to find
    But time has left my heart behind
    One night of love
    One night of love
    Is but a thought inside my mind.

    This last stanza really was the kicker.
    Excellent job my friend ~BRAVO~
    Love Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow..now I'm curious about writing one trijan refrain..It was so heartfelt and at the end you did big job about it
    So touching and great usage of poetry form
    Keep it up,
    Laura