Wow..now I'm curious about writing one trijan refrain..It was so heartfelt and at the end you did big job about it
So touching and great usage of poetry form
Keep it up,
Laura

Jeannie
This is so enchanting :) It just draws you right in....I right away shared it with my son's girlfriend and Nephew....my nephew I had to make him sit and listen...he is not much into poetry...to worried about cracking that next beer can open........this is just such a breathtakimg piece.

From depths too deep I try to rise
On dreams I try to hold
The tears that fall from saddened eyes
Have left me aged and cold
One night of love I try to find
But time has left my heart behind
One night of love
One night of love
Is but a thought inside my mind.

This last stanza really was the kicker.
Excellent job my friend ~BRAVO~
Love Cindy

Beautiful style. You asked me for my opinion about how well you executed it and I must say, you did a pretty good job. I had never heard of this form of poetry before but now I wanna try it because you did it so well lol. In other words, good write.