This was nice. But not great. I don't like the structure and style of this poem. It didn't flow very well but it seems like you were trying something new which is good. All in all though, I'd give this a 3/5.

-Shannon <3

The poem was interesting but I do believe here:
Dreaming
Beginning
To Dream
Got repeative in the same place.
The flow was alright but not very strong. The word choice was deep though I liked that, though wasn't so keen on the structure but still give you a well done on effort. Overall a 3/5 I'd have to say.

~Mel