Very sad poem. I loved the way you had different people represent different situations. This had a lot of powerfull imaginary. 5/5

Wow this was really deep when I read it the first time I thought that it was simply doing going to be about the death of a father or mother but at the end it turns out to be about an absent father, which in some cases can be even worse. I really liked how you didn't mention the real meaning of this poem until the very end, I also really liked the word choices. The only thing that I can see to improve upon if I were you is I would use less words like you and I. I really loved the metaphores that you described however. They were very unique and brought a freshness to the poem that isn't seen very often. I think that my favorite stanza would have to be the forth one. For it shows the troubles that can happen when parrents aren't aroud for their children. And the last line brings a good solid close to the poem. Nice work