Losing the light

by Elapsed   Sep 11, 2007


Propelling through,
empty night streets.

Scorching night heat,
pitiful heart offbeat.

Eyes losing sight,
life spiraling... losing the light.

Nothing left of value,
succumb to the loneliness.

Scorching night heat,
pitiful heart offbeat.

Hollowness flows within,
wanting a new beginning

Scorching night heat,
pitiful heart offbeat.

Child hood dreams,
muffled screams.

Eyes losing sight,
life spiraling... losing the light.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Sam
    Congrats for this being one of the picks for featured writer of the week for R.T.V.W
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    When feelings of depression overcome us we are forced to deal with the pain of everything going wrong in our life. You have pinpointed depression and death in my opinion. Longing for the death to take you and free you from the depression.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    This brought tears to my eyes. Very heartfelt.

    Eyes losing sight,
    life spiraling... losing the light.

    These lines really cut to the heart.
    Excellent job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Some nice imagery though I guess the repetition was effective I did not overly like it. But it did work for this piece. I like the line "Scorching night heat" as it uses night and heat...which can be seen as two contrasting forces. Overall the structure worked and the imagery was good.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by divine divinity

    Your ability to write so well amazes me, your poem has so many levels.

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