Wooooow!! I really like this piece!! Beautiful message within these well written lines. Great job!!

I realy enjoyed this piece. to me it seems very metaphorical and i absolutly love it. made me think of life in ways i have not for a while... lmao!! well anywhos. the only thing i seemed to not like was the fact that there was little puntuation. not all poems need it. but i think this onee needs a little more to septerate certain peices and to make it flow better.

ps- sorry it took me soo long to get you your comment. been on a little down hill slope ... haha :-) good luck on your poems

-terra

I loved this. The imagery was great and I really enjoyed the overall hidden story in this. An interesting take on a poem to write about, but very well done as well.

5.5
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