Hey that was a good poem..i felt ur pain and the lonliness that u felt
keep it up
gr8 write
tk care
bree

please read and comment on some of my new and old poems....will do the same
thanks

Hey that was a good poem..i felt ur pain and the lonliness that u felt
keep it up
gr8 write
tk care
bree

please read and comment on some of my new and old poems....will do the same
thanks

Another terrific write, follows a very nice structure and the flow is flawless. Such a painful piece, full of anguish and heartache.

I can only find one small thing lacking, and its a shame - the very last line ..

"And still my heart feels grieve..."

It should either be ..

"And still my heart feels grief" or
"And still my heart will grieve"

Another heartfelt and truly touching piece.

Keep up the great work.
[5/5]
~Pete.