by Jenni Marie Sep 13, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Today while visiting a loved one |
Oh my god this poem was so sad. I liked how you took such a small image but made it so powerful. The reader was able to see the sadness but also confusion of the little girl as she sat at the tombstone. And that's something that a lot of poems miss. For when someone dies little children aren't able to understand whats happened but in this poem you showed the confusion and the sadness. I also liked how you made the child's lines short and simple while the descriptive lines were more complex. The only critism I have is I would add some punctuation at the end of the lines. Over all nice work. |
by munkee04
I love the way you write your poems, cause they make sense. This is an awesome poem, and i love the title you gave it. It got my attention to read it. And i loved it...Great writing!! |
by Gizmo
When you read a poem, like that you reallycan't be critical, its impossible, that was very well written, and very very sad. good job |
by kris
Wow...I was not expecting that. that made me cry in the middle of english class!! GrEaT JoB!!!!! |
by jessie
Great poem i really liked it alot |