Deep waves

by Veamm   Sep 13, 2007


Deep waves

Waves rush and crash
towards the ill shore
Escaping from tragedy
from the vacant core

Some bubbles emerging
beneath from the heart
Some taste like ink
and blinds any sight

Lives eaten by the ocean
yet no one had survive
cast away from freedom
liquors hungers for life

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  • 17 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Very deep poem written in form

  • 17 years ago

    by Miu

    Ahh i love how the poem really is deeper then it look in first place. Very nice use of words. Though I coulnd feel the emotions so much, but the imagenary was so pretty.
    Keep writing 5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Again, I think you have some extra commas in there. In it's entirety, it's a very captivating little piece of poetry.

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by Raychil

    I really liked this poem. I liked the hidden message in your words. It was very deep without having to say exacly what it meant. I really liked it.
    <3Raych

    thansk for commenting on my poem =)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenna

    Very Well Written...had a nice, sound to it...Keep it up!

    BabyGurl