Now and Forever

by Miranda   Sep 13, 2007


The squirrel looks quizzically,
at the couple on the ground.

She's laughing,he's smiling.
They look the perfect couple.

Holding hands,walking down the street.
They fight,but their never mad for long.
They make each other so happy.

They are the future couple.
You know,the old folks, that are still in love.
The ones that have had love forever,
and keep "till death do us part"

Not because they have too,
but because they love each other.
And could never replace it.

Their love is unconditional.
Not many people find that in a lifetime,
let alone a couple of months.

Nothing will break them apart.
They are and will be together,now and forever!

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This is a poem about my two friends that I'm sure will be together forever.

Thank you both for the inspiration.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The message was heartfelt, and very true. Sadly that it is so true that many people never find love that great. the poem was heartfelt, and nicely penned, you did a good job over all. Try steping up the vocab to add more power, and reread the poem out loud a couple of days after you first write it, to spot any place where the flow might be off, keepp the good work, and best wishes to your friends. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    That is so true. I wish more people had this kind of love and didn't put their kids into a bad situation because of their mistake. I wish your friends the best of luck in staying together. Very nice poem. ^-^

  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    The poem as a whole was good The only thing I would tweek a bit would be the start of the poem with the squarrel part it is a good opening but it seems a bit choppy pertaining to the animal then going staight to them and the fighting part seems too abrupt. Plot121

  • 17 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    They fight,but their never mad for long.
    `their = they're
    The ones that have had love for ever,
    `There shouldn't be a space in between for and ever .

    Mmm ... it has its cuteness about it, but it's not the best I've read. I feel that you could've been more creative with it. Using "They" a lot took away from the poem for me. The beginning was just, wow, but as it hit the middle, my interest started to stray away .

    Keep up the good work tho .
    4/5
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 17 years ago

    by gack60

    Excellent piece sounds like me and my wife, the flow was oozing loved it

    5/5

    Gary.