by Miranda Sep 13, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
The squirrel looks quizzically, |
by Vanessa
The message was heartfelt, and very true. Sadly that it is so true that many people never find love that great. the poem was heartfelt, and nicely penned, you did a good job over all. Try steping up the vocab to add more power, and reread the poem out loud a couple of days after you first write it, to spot any place where the flow might be off, keepp the good work, and best wishes to your friends. 4/5 |
by RobinAnn13
That is so true. I wish more people had this kind of love and didn't put their kids into a bad situation because of their mistake. I wish your friends the best of luck in staying together. Very nice poem. ^-^ |
by Robert
The poem as a whole was good The only thing I would tweek a bit would be the start of the poem with the squarrel part it is a good opening but it seems a bit choppy pertaining to the animal then going staight to them and the fighting part seems too abrupt. Plot121 |
They fight,but their never mad for long. |
by gack60
Excellent piece sounds like me and my wife, the flow was oozing loved it |