Excellent!

its very emotional, thoughts are real and so words are perfect with the concept!

keep it up!

How heartbreaking. You actually got me to tear up and that is a first for me when reading poetry. Great write. The flow was good and it was definitely emotion filled. I also liked the style you used. Keep up the great writing.

*Tears* My little brother's name is Nathaniel, so this hit me hard.
My sincere condolences
xo