I love the flow the rymes the topic, you did a great job 5/5

I loved it. The story was written extremely well, with excellent imagery. The second stanza was a bit off with the flow, but the rest was very easy to read. I love the concept of Dracula's castle being built of screams. That was original. Well done. 5/5

Tammie

I LOVE this...so many people who write about the vampire genre end up being totally cliche, but you pulled this piece of wonderfully.

I love the imagery you painted in this piece, it creates such vivid visuals for the reader that it's like I can -see- everything that you are describing.

Your flow is perfect throughout except in one stanza..

"as you watch the eyes that crawl around,
the eyes you can barely see
the eyes that burn with hate and lust
you know for certain that those eyes,
that they belong to a he"

^^ I found the flow to be terribly off there.

Apart from that though, you did great with this.

That was amazing. I love how i could use my imagination to get such a great image as i was reading. ur very good I must say =] 5/5