You used word-life- too many times in first stanza which leaves really bad impression. Second stanza is my favorite, it is fantastic and third isn't bad at all but I think that you could make even stronger atmosphere. I like the topic and it is really original, I enjoyed in this one. 5/5

Great word usage and vocab here. I love the concept and the piece itself is very meaningful and well written. 5/5

marcella

This is a well written dark poem. I would call it "The agony of doubt and despair"

I really like this! VERY good! the words were perfect and the sound of it...it was just awesome!!!! keep it up!

BabyGurl

Well done. I love the vocabulary you use. I tend to see people stray away from more "advanced" words when it comes to poetry but I embrace them. It just makes it more interesting. And hey if someone doesn't know what a word means then they could simply expand their knowledge and look it up. It didn't pull me in as much as I would have liked it to so I'll give this one a four.

Your vocabulary crazy! that emphasized your poem A LOT. It was a great read and I LOVED IT. filled with meaning i really really like your work 5/5

Excellent!

nice usage of words..great imagery of thoughts and good concept

keep it up!

Well done, just as strong in vocabulary/language. Not one of my favorites of yours but still so well put together and such a good idea for a poem. Keep up the amazing work!
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I truly enjoyed reading this piece. The flow was a bit twitchy to me at parts, but overall was good. The unique concept and viewpoint held this piece together. Good word choice, good ending.

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Wow. This is amazing. Very true. The feeling was so strong when I read this. It was well written and the flow was perfect. Your poems have a lot of emotion in them and that is great, cos it allows people to relate easily.

This piece was quite amazing I enjoyed reading it alot. The emotion portrayed was deep and beautiful, so touching. I'm sure so many people can understand this and also relate to it with there own emotions. Overall such an excellent read I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work. Keep writing. ~Mel

Wow. This was simply magnificent. The emotions were very deep and touching. The flow was flawless and I'm sure that there are many people out there who can relate to this one. :) Lovely job! Overall: 5.5 -- Stephanie Lynn .+.

Yet again another fine example of a great write with great wording. Keep it up.

Peace, Joe

Very good poem. ^-^ I understand it very well and agree with it for the most part. Loved it!

Excellent choice of vocabulary. I see punctuation that needs attention.

Besides the words, well and magnificently written. I am most pleased with your last explanation.

You left a poem to interpret, at the end you were sincere enough to explain the poem. That is the marksmanship of a good, talented poet.

Utterly put in total awe. I am not just impressed, but silenced speechless.

[Voted 5]

_Sam

I love this. Your vocab is excellent for only being 14, I'm really impressed. You used it well, describing things so detailed and the ending it so, so true. A very honest and original poem. I really enjoyed reading it. Well done. 5/5

Tammie

I really like this piece. I love the vocab you use; your choice of language really suits the subject matter of the poem. The imagery is really powerful too, great read.
DnB

The rhetorical questions have a great and positive effect on your poem. It really engaged me to read and stop for a while and ponder :) This is what I call creative poetry :)

Love your poems
Fsams

Very deep, I like this piece a lot. This only thing I don't like is repetition of the word -life- in the first stanza because that ruined the flow in that part. Other than that, whole poem is greatly written. You portrayed truly powerful message and made me think about your words.