Oooh I love how the verses are intertwined very skillfully.. superb work!!

5.5**
<33

WOW!!!!!! This was amazing!
My fav line was, "'Cause if I must be lonely, I'd much rather be alone."

My only suggestion was to take out the word 'just' in this line

Gradually learning it's too much to just ignore.

because it helps the flow. Just a suggestion.
Charisma*

Wow,I really liked this lyrics
It would be a really great song if put true music in it
I especially liked;

We'll never know what we could've been -
Now I've learned how, how not to give in.
You'll never show someone all you can be.
I guess we'll never know about, you and me.

Keep it up Queen Ciao ;)
Laura

Excellent!

honestly i also compose song for my band..well this one is great..the words are full of emotions on it, and every lines lingers a feeling to the reader!

keep it up!

i love your style!

You already know that I love this to pieces, as anyone who reads it probably does. The imagery in this was amazing and the words flow together so well. You wrote this so peronally, but kept it that it could allow the reader to relate to it as well. Love it. :]

5.5
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