Whoa.. haha the title did nothing for this.. the poem itself is just awesome! Great storyline, nice flow, and all in good form! And superb use of words.

My favorite :

"His tainted heart,
A desolate entity,
Killing him slowly."

So many can relate to that..Wonderful work!

5.5**
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^^is correct so many can relate to those lines

"His tainted heart,
A desolate entity,
Killing him slowly."

VERY GOOD! i really like it! ALOT! the words were so vivid and it had an awesome flow.

thanks for you comments
BabyGurl

Aww, this poem is really sad and it's filled with lots of emotion. I really like it a lot. The flow of it was great! You really have a way with words. Keep on writing! 5/5

~Kristina

Your way with words is brilliant. You truly did an amazing job, the title was good but the content of the poem was so powerful and everything about it was perfect.
Love always,
Tara-Kay
x

I love the way you make your poems so short yet have so much meaning in them!!
well done really like your work flowed really well!!

Keep it up 5/5

Love
Jacs
xxx

WOW!!
It's very very good.

Wow that is deep annd dark

Very good. I could picture it in my head. The second stanza was my favorite. I would vote a 4.6 but I can't so I'll round it up to a five.

I love this. Very dark & creative.

"He speaks of silence,
A manipulated tongue,
One breath off insanity."

^ That 2nd line was just amazing. I adore it. (: Fabulous job, deary. 5.5
Keep writing.

--- Stephanie Lynn .+.

WOW i like this one... really a good and brilliant poem... keep up...

Heyy this was really good. i liked the words used and the structure. very powerful keep it up xx

I love your strong vocabulary on this piece. the title how ever confuses me a bit.
5

Very short poem and to the point, I thought the word choice was once again perfect and the flow was as well. Fantastic job again 5/5 GG23 P.S. sorry it took a few days to get back to you - Take Care

I was slightly confused. im a little embarresed to say it though. :P. anyway, it was still really great. keep writing. you seem like a cool person. id like to get to know you. haha not in a creepy way, but just on this website lol. oops.

Very good, dark to me ^^ but good. Short but to the point. Best one I read all day so far ^^ 5/5