This was an excellent poem. It was elegantly mature; I loved the twisting of the feeling of security, it was quite intruiging (It might just be me who got this feeling :P) Anywhoo, the overall design of the poem plucked all the right strings in my own memories. I, simply, could identify with the poem, and I think it's purely beautiful, and would be flawless if it wasn't for the flow of the 8th line.

Awesome write you created here, "Sweet Fragility" (since I don't know your name)

~Richhiieeeee

What a beautiful piece of poetry. The repetition of the first line was very powerful and brilliant. It made the piece more meaningful and wasn't overbearing. The flow was wonderful as well. 5/5

marcella

Incredible poem, metaphors are great and it is very unique. You created superb atmosphere and every line is filed with emotions. I don't prefer love poetry but this one is amazing! Well done! I really enjoy in it.

Amazing Poem!! Brilliant written and creative.. I really enjoyed reading this.. and very good flow as well! Great Poem!

5.5**
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Wow this is the best metaphor I have read in a love poem for quite a while. It seems to reflect the reality that the beauty of romance is usually brief indeed

This is SOOOOOOOOO AMAZING! the words were perfect and the flow was perfect to! the emotions ugh...all i can say is AMAZING! its beautiful!
KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

BabyGurl

Excellent rhyming. I loved how you repeated the first line. It really puts enphasis on it. Plus it's an awesome line/title. 5.

This a very creative and beautiful piece. I loved the flow of the poem. The repitition of the first line in each verse, it created a sense of perfection as well as complition. 5/5

Excellent!

for this one..its very deep and a thinking poem maybe, your vocab is great..descriptive and and so expressive..your have transform youir thoughts into art..its great!

keep it up!

Oh wow.. another beautifully penned written piece by you. I really love the use of repetition in this poem, the flow was flawless. And again your word choice is amazing.

5/5

Well done, just amazing. The flow the idea. You have used language in all of your poems that is just so strong. You express your emotion in such a talented way. Great Job!

I like this one, it is really greatly written and deep. 5/5 for you keep up...

Good flow, amazing poem. I loved it. Great job.

...death...lament.....and butterfly, i love how you threw that contrast in there...this was an incredible piece, you have amazing form and your word choice was killer, great job on this!

What a superb piece of art. The repetition of the first line kept the piece strong and interesting -- really held a nice structure. Your vocabulary was, again, great, and the idea is executed wonderfully.

Amazing job!
You ooze talent.
Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Oh wow! I love this poem. Your wording you used was so so strong and the flow and repeativity (SP?) of "
Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;" was amazing. Great work!

This was a great poem written so greatly.
it shows that you have a great talent, keep up the great work.

a 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it

Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;

hmm that line reminds me alot of a poem I wrote same few ending words..
I really did enjoy this piece I must say it was quite beautiful. Sweetly written. Well done on this one keep up the great work. ~Mel

Such a beautiful poem... enjoyed every stanza, every word, every letter lol 5/5 keep it up

I love this. It was absolutely amazing.
The repetition of that first line was great & the metaphors used within the poem was spectacular. The flow was flawless and I have no complaints on this one. You did an amazing job. :) Overall: 5.5 ---- Stephanie Lynn .+.